Sunday, February 13, 2011

The cover letter of my dream?

Dear Sir,

I study at XXXX in second year and I am looking for an internship in the power field from May to August. From the AREVA web site I learned that AREVA is the only engineering firm in the United States working in every stage of the nuclear fuel cycle. However I did not see any advertisement for an internship. Since I am very interested in working to AREVA because it should be the best way to use all my knowledge about electro technique, project management or computer science, I write you to know if there is an opportunity to do an internship in your company.

I have already worked with Anglo-Saxon teams during my latest internship when I was in charge of the monitoring of spare parts of the hight speed train. On top of that I am studying at the XXX which gives me the opportunity to practice my English in the fields of computer science, data management, mathematics or macro economy. I really enjoy working with international team partners that is the reason why I am looking for an internship in the USA. I would prefer work in quality or engineering services because these fields interested me particularly however I am ready to work in any service of your company if you fell it more useful.

Attached is a copy of my resume, which more fully details my qualifications.

I look forward to talking with you regarding possibilities of internship in AREVA.

Yours Faithfully,

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4 comments:

  1. Hey dude,

    your dream job is really quite interesting and noble. Looking forward to seeing you come up with solutions to SAVE OUR EARTH.

    Not sure if you left out your contact number on purpose, but apart from that, I think you could talk more about yourself in terms of your communication skills and how good a team player are you since you would be working with other people in a team.

    Perhaps your exchange program in Singapore could give the recipients extra incentive to read your resume and leave an impression in them.

    Also, I think the part on no advertisement on internship could be removed. Expressing your interest will do.

    Cai Jie

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  2. Hi Thomas, please upload your job adv so your classmates can better comment on your application letter.

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  3. Hey Thomas,

    I admire your dream job. I am interested in working in the energy industry too.

    I feel that is much you can do to make your application letter more appealing. I question the need for writing that you have worked with "Anglo-Saxon" teams before. Perhaps you want to show them that you have worked with English speaking teams before?

    I believe this sentence can be improved too.

    "Since I am very interested in working to AREVA because it should be the best way to use all my knowledge about electro technique, project management or computer science, I write you to know if there is an opportunity to do an internship in your company."

    An alternative could be, "I am very interested in working to AREVA because it is the best way to utilize my knowledge about electro techniques, project management and computer science."

    You can also highlight the qualities and skills you possessed that makes you suitable for the internship. I am sure those in charge would like to know that.

    Like what Cai Jie has said, you could have included your contact details too.

    Hope you get the internship man!

    PS: I found the internship on AREVA website if you are still looking for it man.

    http://areva.taleo.net/careersection/4/joblist.ftl?lang=en#

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  4. Hi Thomas,

    Interesting job you're seeking there! :D Anyway, I think that you may want to state your purpose of writing this application letter in the first line as it informs the reader immediately. With that, maybe you want to remove the last line of the first paragraph since your purpose is conveyed. Also, I think that the first paragraph can better capture the reader's attention if you write with the "You" attitude. Maybe, you can tell the company how you will benefit them if they offer you the internship. Apart from that, I think that the second paragraph can be more concise and you can add in more about the qualities you possess.

    I wish you all the best with your application! :)

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